“ He’d been the one whose family had kept the treasure of Lohengrin’s sword until one day the knight should return to wield the blade again.” Question. I thought Mytho was carrying the sword when little Fakir first found him. Isn’t that how Charon was charged with safeguarding it?
“Rue shook her head. “The Raven stole me when I was a baby.” Charon had the strangest look on his face.”
I read those lines and thought. “Oh dear.” And ya, you went there. XD Fakir/Rue-sibling theory ahoy! Frankly, I don’t really buy it, but you wrote it out very well!
“but she lacked Fakir’s ability to just stare into space for a moment and have the shape of the story and know where the heroine had gone.”
XD HA! Fakir has spidy-sence! . . . I swear I didn’t just type that up. Wow. Need sleep. Now. . . . But seriously!!!! Fakir’s now like Santa Clause! “He knows when you are sleeping. Be knows when you’re awake!” . . . Santa and Drosselmeyer are related!?!? O_o …Sleep. Now.
“Fakir had a grave. He hadn’t visited it the way he had Drosselmeyer’s, but he knew it existed. Somewhere Lohengrin’s corporeal body slowly rotted into the soil, while his spirit had torn free of the flesh and lingered, its task of protecting the prince unfulfilled. He was Lohengrin reborn to that purpose, just as he suspected Ahiru was Princess Tutu reborn to finish her task of restoring the prince. Individually, they’d failed the first time; only together had they set the story right.”
That was actually a real punch to the gut to read – the fact that he had a grave. As in, in Tutu-verse the knight comes from a story, so there’s no need to even think about his grave. However, in your blend of story and truth there Mytho actually rules Goldcrown… it’s a chilling thought. And you wrote it fantastically.
" The one stubborn lock that always sprang straight up defied their efforts to tame it, though, and they finally gave up.”
MUAHA! Anime gravity-defying hair bows to NO ONE! MUAHAHAHAHA! done now.
After all that description in the first chapter, I would have liked to read Fakir’s reaction to Ahiru seeing his birthmark. Other than that, I was completely content! Wonderful story. Wonderfully written! An absolute delight to read! ^^
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Question. I thought Mytho was carrying the sword when little Fakir first found him. Isn’t that how Charon was charged with safeguarding it?
“Rue shook her head. “The Raven stole me when I was a baby.”
Charon had the strangest look on his face.”
I read those lines and thought. “Oh dear.” And ya, you went there. XD Fakir/Rue-sibling theory ahoy! Frankly, I don’t really buy it, but you wrote it out very well!
“but she lacked Fakir’s ability to just stare into space for a moment and have the shape of the story and know where the heroine had gone.”
XD HA! Fakir has spidy-sence! . . . I swear I didn’t just type that up. Wow. Need sleep. Now.
. . . But seriously!!!!
Fakir’s now like Santa Clause! “He knows when you are sleeping. Be knows when you’re awake!”
. . . Santa and Drosselmeyer are related!?!? O_o
…Sleep. Now.
“Fakir had a grave. He hadn’t visited it the way he had Drosselmeyer’s, but he knew it existed. Somewhere Lohengrin’s corporeal body slowly rotted into the soil, while his spirit had torn free of the flesh and lingered, its task of protecting the prince unfulfilled. He was Lohengrin reborn to that purpose, just as he suspected Ahiru was Princess Tutu reborn to finish her task of restoring the prince. Individually, they’d failed the first time; only together had they set the story right.”
That was actually a real punch to the gut to read – the fact that he had a grave. As in, in Tutu-verse the knight comes from a story, so there’s no need to even think about his grave. However, in your blend of story and truth there Mytho actually rules Goldcrown… it’s a chilling thought. And you wrote it fantastically.
" The one stubborn lock that always sprang straight up defied their efforts to tame it, though, and they finally gave up.”
MUAHA! Anime gravity-defying hair bows to NO ONE! MUAHAHAHAHA!
done now.
After all that description in the first chapter, I would have liked to read Fakir’s reaction to Ahiru seeing his birthmark. Other than that, I was completely content! Wonderful story. Wonderfully written! An absolute delight to read! ^^